Mark Hernandez | Writing Coach
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Thursday 01 October 2026 23:19:19 GMT
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a🤍 :
my hook right now is: “I never deleted photos; even the blurry ones felt too important to lose.” and go on to say how I questioned my memories and identity through psychology and art, and realized that memories don’t have to be perfectly accurate to be meaningful, because the people and experiences behind them are what matter.
2026-10-02 08:18:04
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🐞Nat🐞 :
“Children should be seen and not heard. A phrase so deeply rooted in society that not one seems to question it.” It’s about how my story of the public school system failing me inspired me to become an educator so that no one has to go through what I did.
2026-10-02 01:27:35
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Its_Maggie_Bro :
What DO you like then Mr. Riddles 😭😭
2026-10-02 01:23:03
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reagan🪷 :
My hook right now is “I’ve never seen more than 8 people at once” is this good? I don’t want to reveal my essay just tell me if you are hooked
2026-10-02 01:21:55
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rey :
"Despite being my parent's lastborn, I've never known what it feels like to be the youngest child." I then go on to talk about my older brother with disabilities and how I had to be the bigger person all the time
2026-10-02 01:48:28
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Aleah :
I just trauma dumped and got a full ride
2026-10-02 01:53:32
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jfunpants :
The opening of my essay was “I love to stare at people” and I’m going to UC Berkeley now
2026-10-02 02:06:24
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brooklyn 🪩 :
ok i keep going back and forth between a few of my ideas but one of them is: “i have 144 spotify playlists, and 107 of them are named after people who don’t exist.” i have playlists for every fictional i like and i was to going to write my essay about how i love creating, not always just from scratch but when i like something i always imagine more
2026-10-04 16:46:28
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Mark Hernandez | Writing Coach :
Never ever ever continue your essay in the additional information section
2026-10-01 23:23:01
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gizelle :
“I died 3 times in 4 days and everyone watched” is a hook I have rn in my rough draft
2026-10-02 00:56:47
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Lera ;) :
“Having a twin is congruent to watching a movie based on your book.” was mine… I wrote about my identity as a twin and how my sister and I are like movie adaptations of books, we’re so so similar but still have our own individual traits, which was my segue into an essay about my interest in movie adaptations of books and how it relates to the difference between my sister and I
2026-10-02 03:26:03
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izzy :
As I fell backward and headfirst into the frigid black ocean, I went weightless. (about scuba diving experience & how it taught me to always chase the unknown)
2026-10-02 00:58:51
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𓇽 anna 𓇽 :
for a first sentence, would this be okay? “i’ve used the same password my whole life.” i go on to say how the format of it has stayed the same but how the specific numbers and symbols have changed with my experiences.
2026-10-01 23:28:26
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Mag_Pup :
“One day you will look back and realize you didn’t actually hate the color pink.”
2026-10-02 16:44:03
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alicia_fe1iz :
Is, “My friends ran around, danced, and did well in sports, but my world was reduced to the size of my swollen knees.” A good hook
2026-10-02 00:52:55
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jazmine_thomson :
Is “11:59 p.m. feels longer on December 4th.” good?
2026-10-02 01:05:10
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mads :
“i begin every swim lesson pretending to be a goldfish”…thoughts?
2026-10-02 02:41:24
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🐒 :
Wait genuinely curious what do you suggest to write about I swear I’ve never seen you compliment someone’s prompt idea (not hating just curious)
2026-10-02 01:00:43
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Cate Counts :
My essay is about how a butterfly can’t see its own wings, similar to how I failed to see my strengths (wings) and I go into examples of dismissing praise and then realizing that I am worthy and good enough and have my own strengths. My ending sentence is “I do not know exactly where my wings will take me, but I finally recognize they were strong enough all along” what do you think?
2026-10-01 23:57:08
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Kaysia Jungkookie🌷🪐✨ :
"if I don't commit any more sins in the life, I'm sure I'll come back as a Siberian bird in my next life." is it good for a first line???
2026-10-02 09:26:16
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🌞 :
“I measure moments in bluebirds.” an essay abt the inherited perspective i gained from my schizophrenic dad, but not making the whole premise that he’s schizophrenic lol
2026-10-02 16:01:21
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Alex! :
Mine is “I hate sweating. Always have, always will.” I talk about how soccer taught me that the most meaningful parts of the game aren’t always about personal glory, but about embracing the sacrifice and unselfish moments that help teammates succeed. My last sentence is: “I still hate sweating, but sweating for others is a whole lot more beautiful than sweating for myself.”
2026-10-02 03:27:59
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js_jessyy :
how’s this if i start with:“estudia no quiero que seas como nosotros” means “study I don’t want you to be like us” and continue talking about how my immigrant parents always supported me and their influence on me.
2026-10-02 00:26:46
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frankie :
my essay is based off a historical metaphor. is it okay to provide context as the first few sentences then quickly flip the narrative toward myself
2026-10-02 01:42:36
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Mark Hernandez | Writing Coach :
And never ever use the essay to simply list your activities
2026-10-01 23:23:18
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