Mark Hernandez | Writing Coach
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Chrissy :
Is this hook ok? “I am music.” The whole essay will basically be about how music and math are a big part of my personality and sense of self I guess. I thought it would be a good way to show who I am as a person.
2026-10-30 10:33:56
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jazzie :
what do you think of this hook? “I am, for all intents and purposes, a sleeper agent for CVS Pharmacy.” essay is about how communicating with a brother with selective mutism via greeting cards fostered a love for language and expression (likely going to be english/comp lit major). the “sleeper agent for cvs” part is about how i go to cvs for pretty much any occasion that could require writing a greeting card, birthdays and such, with my “signal” or “trigger phrase” being a google calendar notif
2026-10-30 03:45:16
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⚭🪩Zion🪩⚭ :
I wrote 2 essays. prompt 6: abt my love of letterboxd and rating and reviewing movies. then prompt 7. about avatar the last airbender and relating my life to Zuko and my search for my destiny. can u help me pick which one to submit🙏
2026-10-30 04:58:29
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Zain :
thoughts on my hook? “This isn’t how you’re supposed to write a college essay.” I write about how everyone’s uniqueness creates conformity, and me questioning my place in it all, using my experience in game development to question my creativity.
2026-10-30 02:03:41
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leahbidabodabutt :
hi mark! what if my first sentence is “flies make me cry.” and talk about how their fast paced movements mirror the how fast life moves and how i’ve grown to accept life and to not be scared of living
2026-10-30 00:36:15
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anna🤍 :
@anna🤍: @anna🤍: Could I write about feeling like the oldest child in my family despite being younger, going into how dynamics in my family shaped me, my siblings requiring more attention and needs and once they moved out my parents relying on me as a friend to each of them after divorce, it’s a little jumbled but will follow those kinds of dynamics I was raised with and the impacts
2026-10-30 02:59:00
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Paxton 🎧📀 :
What do you think about this for someone wanting to do architecture and wanting to tie that in to their social anxiety “walls are my best friend” then I’ll go on about how I’ve always felt in the background observing life instead of living life
2026-10-30 00:09:35
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Teagan✰ :
😦I just submitted my essay in this exact format
2026-10-30 20:09:00
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katherine :
hi mark! i wrote two essays, the first starting with “I got my sidekick when I was 8 years old,” my sidekick bring my camera, and how it has led me to new experiences in traveling, extracurriculars, and in life, and my second being about how i have a specific pen for very occasion, and expanding upon that by talking about different aspects of my creativity and learning through each pen. which would u recommend I submit, or which seems more intriguing?
2026-10-30 05:51:43
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angelleal :
I have a important question so my leadership essay is all about some project I did with like undocumented immigrants I made a public health video to let them know how to avoid getting a flu I’m just curious because like the whole point was because their fear of ice but idk if I should mention the undocumented and Ice part please help
2026-10-30 01:44:55
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niki :
My first paragraph is “I’ve spent years looking up to something that has never looked back. Whether painted in the softest pastels of dawn or the dusky purples of sunset, the sky never seems to run out of ways to express itself. I find that fascinating, having spent much of my life struggling to give outward expression to a heart and mind that are anything but quiet.”
2026-10-30 20:17:26
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<3 :
Can I write mines about how I spent my high school years living under another name? Except it’s due to a difference in name structure between my country and America and how I’ve learned to value both identities or is it too overused?
2026-10-30 05:29:28
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kat⁉️ :
is it boring to write about my lifelong bsf and how she influenced me contrasting my current bsf who helped me find my voice and who i want to be instead of following someone else? how friendship for a long time cant compare to someone that actually understands me and gives me room to figure out who i am for myself without influence and guidelines?
2026-10-30 02:11:15
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johnkastanos :
This is what I did. It’s over
2026-10-30 12:56:13
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ava👺 :
I’m writing my essay about this parallel story i have between my French horn playing and my undiagnosed ADHD/OCD. long story short i had a horn with a mechanical defect from 7th grade causing it to be out of tune, nobody believed me and told me i was just a bad player, i was desperate to be in tune and frustrated with why i couldn’t, someone believed me eventually, it worked out and i got a new horn from the company. But it was hard to let the other one go and adapt to the new changes, though the validation that it was actually a mechanical defect was everything. This is like an exact mirror/extended metaphor for my undiagnosed ADHD/OCD until my junior/senior year, being one of the biggest challenges ive had to overcome in my life. Sorry i know this is long, but basically im only focusing on overcoming the challenge and what i learned along the way, not it being like sad/traumatic and depressing if that makes sense. is that a good topic or should i do something else? i’m very passionate about music/the horn, im going into it for my major
2026-10-30 00:37:39
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Kunal modi :
My essay is about how the legend of Zelda series made me explore the unknowns of summer camp letting me realize that I am a open-minded human being
2026-10-30 02:28:42
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Sanjana 🙉🙊 :
What if I talked about experiences that made me feel different from others because of a condition but through my love of superheroes it made me realize that I can use my personal experiences and strengths to help others with my condition
2026-10-30 01:45:58
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Mark Hernandez | Writing Coach :
For “Why Major?”: very quick intro about your initial interest; what you’re doing now that’s major-related; what you’ll do when you get to that college.
2026-10-29 23:23:53
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aurora :
My hook was a saying from a popular TikTok trend. How is that?
2026-10-30 12:03:04
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nolanrdsmith :
What do you think of “After my dad’s funeral, I sat in the darkness, swallowed by a chartreuse chair whose vibrant color was entirely lost to the shadows.” I go on to talk about my perception of death. Then, I talk about how my perception has changed as I grew and reflected.
2026-10-30 12:51:11
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Mark Hernandez | Writing Coach :
If the rest of the application does not convince the admissions officer of your interest in your major, one supposed mic drop won’t do it.
2026-10-29 23:22:18
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Mark Hernandez | Writing Coach :
Sorry, LEGO enthusiasts who feel targeted.
2026-10-29 23:27:29
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Franess mode :
Thoughts on this hook please: My mother doesn't remember the movie she watched, but it gave me my name: Amanda
2026-10-30 07:36:29
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5️⃣⭐️ :
How’s my hook sentence: If you fell in love with a married man, would you rather be the wife or stay the mistress?
2026-10-30 12:14:39
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tishuuuu5 :
that means PERSONAL STATEMENT is all about me? no major or why this uni or major? and no future goals or background education?
2026-11-01 08:24:51
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